Realized about Rhythms

It is a few weeks ago before I realized that my poems had not good rhythms. So, I edited them. And now, they are better.

Please read this poem aloud.

The Monster

One sunny day, I escaped from school.
I met a monster which was starting to drool.
It looked at me and licked its lips
and used its hands to grab my hips.

It stared at me and rubbed its tummy.
It licked its lips; then it said, “Yummy!”
I stared at it and perspired in fear
as the monster smiled and shook its rear.

It tossed me high up to the air;
I thought I was having a nightmare.
I screamed a scream and blinked a blink
as I fell into its mouth which really stink.

The monster tasted me and said, “Yucky!”
It spat me out; I was quite lucky.
I flew out of the monster’s mouth
like a cannonball; I was heading south.

I thought it would be my last,
but I landed at the entrance of my class.
And because I escaped from my school,
my teacher whacked me like a fool.

Haha…Now read this poem aloud

The Monster

One day, when I escaped from class,
I met a monster that was crass.
It looked at me and licked its lips
and used its hands to grab my hips.

It stared at me and rubbed its tummy.
It licked its lips; then it said, “Yummy!”
I stared at it and gasped in fear.
The monster smiled and shook its rear.

It tossed me high up to the air;
It was like having a nightmare.
I was afraid, that’s why I yelled
while falling in its mouth which smelled.

It tasted me and then said, “Yucky!”
It spat me out; I was quite lucky.
I flew out of the monster’s mouth,
like a cannonball, heading south.

I thought that it would be my last,
but I fell at the door of class.
Because I escaped from my school,
my teacher whacked me like a fool.

Well, doesn’t it sound better than the last one?
That is because I ‘rhythmized‘ it, making it nicer to read than the last version of the poem.

Last time, I didn’t know about that because I thought that my poems already had a rhythm. I tend to read some verses faster and some slower, making me think that they were okay.

Later, I’ll come up with an article, very soon
‘How to Rhythmize and Rhyme Your Poems’.

So, don’t forget to check back!

Update: How to Rhythmize and Rhyme Your Poems


My Cute and Funny Cats

Looks like my cats are starting to pose for some cute and funny photos. Well, it was definitely worth to take some photos of them, and here they are!


Snowy: Do I look like a girl? I guess not.


The First Video Clip I Made For One of My Poems

Finally, the first video clip came out… It’s not an animation. It’s just a simple video clip with pictures, and me reading the poem…with some sound effects I made. You can view it.

Pranks on the Principal

Nick pasted a ‘kick me’ note on the principal’s back.
The one who placed thumbtacks on the school floor was Jack.
Mike had put the principal’s chair somewhere in the street.
Sam secretly ate the principal’s food: the broccoli and meat.

The principal was walking with the ‘kick me’ note on him.
The one who kicked the principal was the teacher, Tim.
When the principal reached his place, he just sat down.
His chair wasn’t there, so his butt banged on the ground.

He had no other choice but to just stand up and eat.
When he opened his Tupperware, no broccoli and meat!
He was very, very, very angry and he did care,
and went off to the street to find his missing chair.

After that, he grouped the things: his lost and found chair,
the ‘kick me’ note which was on him, and his Tupperware.
He said to them, “There is a thing that I’d like to mention:
All of you must be whacked and punished in detention!”

So, he walked while carrying the things to be put in detention.
Oh! There is one more thing I almost forgotten to mention.
On the way there, he, by accident, stepped on the thumbtacks.
The one who laughed when he fell was the student, Max.

Bet you laughed!


The Visit to FRIM

It was exciting! I have never been to a field trip with my schoolmates before! I went to FRIM (Forest Research Institute Malaysia) on 26 July 2008 with my school as a field trip. I learned about the trees and plants over there.

It was fun, I had to hike. It was tiring but fun . Unfortunately, I did not see any animals (they must be sleeping).

The Journey Begins

So, we (me and my schoolmates) got in the bus, and the bus stared moving. It is a long ride. On the way there, I saw my old house area.

Finally, we arrived at FRIM. After coming down, I had nasi lemak, a kind of spicy Malay food.

Two-ur Guides

After we eat, we lined up in four lines as teacher said. Then two female tour guides came and introduced themselves. We were divided into two groups.

The Hike Begins

So, we began our hike through a high hill (more like a small mountain). It was tiring (because I took my bag up with me), but fun.

On the way, my group’s tour guide showed us a blue fern and told us that it reflects sunlight. So, it is blue. The parts that are not affected by the sunlight, stays green.

The tour guide also explained about the liana tree. Local people call it ‘Tarzan’ tree. She explained that there is water inside the tree.

The blue fern and the liana (the vine)
(Sorry because I did not bring my camera and these
are only photos of the things I saw from the internet
and that means I took none of the photos here)

Huge Steps

After that, we went into a small path, you have to walk up the hill (there are rocks and planks as ladders. You have to take huge steps to go up).

It was very tiring because walking up is pushing yourself up each step. At least we got to rest when we are hiking 🙂 .

The Canopy Bridge

Soon, after the huge steps, we arrived at the canopy bridge. We had to queue up to walk on the bride because the bride can support only a few people at a time.

It was a long queue. But I just couldn’t wait to walk on the bridge! How exciting it would be! I waited and waited. And finally, hello, bridge!

Hello, Bridge!

I walked on the bride carefully. I am not afraid of the heights. It is more exciting than scary; more like an adventure. I loved to look down and see how high the bridge is! I reached a spot where you can see a beautiful view of a part of the town.

Finally, I got down from the bridge and continue hiking; down this time.

The Jungle Adventure Begins

So, we got were hiking down, to another part of FRIM, it is part of the hill, too but it looks more like a forest this time and we don’t have to take huge steps because we are not going up.

The tour guide first explained about the common fern and the giant fern, and tells that it reproduces by spores (we had already learned this in class). The common fern has spores on its bottom while the giant fern has spores on its sides.

After that, we went in the area and the tour guide explained about the ficus tree. Its roots could store water and they are strong, too.

Then, we saw the jelutong tree. It is the tree that we use to make pencils because the wood is light and strong. It has rubber, too; in which we use to make chewing gum.

Next stop is the camphor tree. Its leaves smell like mangoes and its trunk, ointment.

After that, we headed to the elephant tree. Its roots are shaped like an elephant’s head. Too bad I didn’t get a photo of that 🙁 .

The tour guide explained about more trees, but there are some that I can’t remember.

The Garden

It was fun there too. We got to see a big fish and turtles at the pond. We said bye to our tour guides. I learned a lot there. After that, we followed our teacher to the cafeteria.

The Last Hours at FRIM

We had lunch. I ate rice with a salty egg (I love salty eggs). I talked to my friends, ate ice cream.

After that, teacher led us to a place near a waterfall (in FRIM) where some people went swimming. We watched the people swim and rested.

Then, we went to visit the traditional houses of Malaysia. Too bad we are not allowed to get inside it.

The Wheels on the Bus Goes Round and Round

Finally, we got in the bus to go back. The bus has a TV on it, and I watched a movie 🙂 . And the effect is carsick (rather bus-sick) 🙁 . I was feeling uncomfortable and tired.

Finally, I arrived at school (you arrive at school before the drivers take you home), good thing too. I got a free chrysanthemum drink from teacher (it cured my carsick…or bus-sick). The oxygen also made me feel better. But I was very, very tired.

So, I rested on a bench, and almost slept! Luckily, my friend woke me up…by walking out of school when I opened my eyes. So, I finally decided I’d cycle back home (I cycle to school).

What I Like at FRIM

I liked everything (except the bus-sick part), but I liked the canopy bridge the most. You feel like you are walking on air! I loved to look down (I mentioned this earlier). You feel like you are going through an adventure!

Next, I like the walk through the forest part. I loved to see the trees and hear the tour guide explain. I also loved the part when the tour guide asked us to crush a leaf from a camphor tree. It really smelled like mango, while the trunk smelled like oil.

I also liked the part where I took big steps 🙂 . It was really tiring but really fun, too. I liked the part where I drank spring water. It tastes like normal water but is nicer and colder.

I really learned a lot and…


(Maybe next time when I go there again I would bring my camera and post all the original photos here)